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Started by Pin_the_Person
(2014-01-25 02:04:59)

Pin_the_Person (2014-01-25 02:04:59)

The Story of Kylinzia ~ Written by Pin_the_Person

(I'd like to thank SoulReaper~ (Kawaii) and RyanHuen (Ryan) for entering!! .3. Also, PM me your character's information and backstory for a chance to get in my story!!)

Provlouge~

Lets see... Where to begin... Well, I'm Kylinzia Topaz. I'm 16 years of age... and... yeah. You can call me Kylin if you'd like... Well, I was walking down the streets of my hometown. As I was walking down the street, I saw a young girl. She laughed and played... She reminded me of myself. Playful... Well, that's to my opinion, of course. Anyway, the young girl walked up to me.

Chapter 1 ~ I Meet A Girl With My Intrests

"What's your name?" she asked.

I took a deep breath, and replied. "I'm Kylinzia. And you are...?"

"I'm Devonna. DEE-VOH-NAH. "

I laugh. "I see. So, what are you doing, DEE-VOH-NAH? "

Devonna laughed. "Nothing, KAI-LIN-ZEE-AH."

I laughed once more. "Well, then lets do something then."

"Okay!!"

I sit on some houseowner's porch, and take out my sketchbook. " I drew these myself. You like 'em?"

Devonna smiled. "Yeah!! Who's that guy over there? "

I looked at the drawing Devonna was pointing at. "Oh, no-one. I just put it there. "

Devonna seemed curious. "Are you telling the truth? You aren't lying to me, are you!? "

I laughed. "If I lied, would I have shown you it? "

She thought for a moment. "No. . ."

"Exactly," I said, nodding my head positively. "You can't always believe what you see. Otherwise, your life would be ruined."

"Really?"

"Yup."

".... Are you kidding? "

"Yup. "

We both laughed, and we played until Devonna's mom called her for dinner. "I've gotta go. It was nice meeting you, Kylinzia!! "

I laughed, and I watched her walk away to her mom. "It was nice meeting you, too. "

Chapter 2~ The Truth Really Does Hurt

As I was walking home, I saw my great- or, as for me, not-so great- nieghbors.

"Tell your siblings to get off my lawn. I'm sick of them putting bug spray on my carrots, " complained my worse nieghbor, Mrs. Lochner.

I only rolled my eyes. "Like they're gonna listen, " I mumbled. Mrs. Lochner gave me a death stare, as if she was going to take out a gun and shoot me. Anyway, when I returned home, my older sister looked at me.

"Oh, still playing with kids? Lame. "

"Oh, now we know who will be a terrible mother, " I struck back. I flipped my hair and went upstairs. I eaves-dropped my parents, when they were in my room.

"... Are you sure about this, Richard? "

"Yes, Sahara. And I assure you, she will be okay on her own. Even when she's young. "

"Honey, one of them is sixteen. Are you sure she can handle it? "

My dad nodded. My mom gave out a big sigh. "Okay, Richy. I trust you. " Richy? Was that supposed to be a nickname?

I go into the room, and my parents gasped.

"Kylin, you weren't... eaves-dropping, were you? "

I felt brave. "I did. You are going to kick Angeline out, just like that? "

My dad looked down. "No. "

I look at my parents, confused. "Then... what's going on? "

My mom put her hand on my shoulder. "We're kicking you out. "

Chapter 3 ~ Another Night Of Camping... I Think

I look at my mom, and a get her hand off my shoulder. "What!? Mom, I'm only sixteen!! "

"Honey, I know, but- "

"But what!? What is it this time!? You can't afford me!? You do this everytime!! I'm tired of it!! All you care about is Angeline's grades, her collage funds, and stuff like that, but you never care about your second-oldest daughter!? How is that fair!? " I felt a tear run down my face.

"Kylin-"

"Don't 'Kylin' me!! " I run downstairs and go to the living room. I bury my head in my arms, and begin to cry. My little twin siblings- Johnny and Becca- walked into the room, and saw me crying.

"Kylin, are you okay? " asked Becca, comforting.

I sob. "N-n-no... "

"Why not? " asked Johnny.

"B-b-because m-mom a-and d-dad are k-k-kicking me o-out. "

Both Johnny and Becca gasp. "What?! You can't leave!! "

"Yeah, you're the best sister ever!! "

"Better than Angeline? "

"WAY better than Angeline, if you ask me, " said Johnny, mimicing Angeline on the phone. I laugh.

"Well, I'll miss you guys the most. "

"Better than Angeline? " Becca said, jokingly.

I laugh. "Definently. "

At that point, Angeline stepped in. "Oh, boo-hoo, you're leaving! " She scoffed. "That will only mean a bigger room for me!! "

Becca stepped up. "Don't get too used to it, Angeline. You're going to collage, remember? "

All of us laugh, except for Angeline. "Ha-ha, very funny. " She scowled at me, and walked away.

When I exited the house, and wondered where I should be heading. For some reason, I decided that the woods would be a great place. I do have a lot of experience with camping, with my OTHER dad.

Yeah, he was fun to hang out with. My friends were jealous that I had SUCH an awesome parent. SO jealous, that they sabotadged his FAVORITE car, and he then died in a car crash. Yeah, I know.

Me and Angeline don't really get along after what happened. In fact, since she was "popular," she joined in, and blamed it on ME. I was furious!! Ever since then, we've been hating eachother.

Anyway, I walked into the woods. I started a fire, and I picked up a stick to use in the fire. I didn't know why, but I didn't put it in the fire. I mean, I WOULD have, but. . . it didn't seem right. I put it next to me, and started the fire. In the middle of nowhere, a huge blast hit me. I realized I was holdin the stick.

". . . What the heck!? "

I then heard a familier voice. "You really did have a reason. "

I looked up, and saw who said that. It was Devonna. "Devonna, what are you doing here? "

"You did those drawings for a reason, Kylinzia. Because it was your fate. "

"My what? "

"Those told the furture. The pictures, I mean. "

"Wha- What do you mean!? "

Chapter 4 ~ I Find Out I Have Powers, And My New Friend Is A Robot

"I mean, that in your heart, you are someone with the powers you desire," said Devonna. I looked at the young girl with no understandment. "... I'm just an illusion."

I was REALLY suprised when she said that. Then, I saw something in her eye. It seemed that she didn't see what I saw. She could see a lie, and she could see everything. How could I know all that? Well, luckily, Devonna answered that question.

"I am no robot, just to assure you. I generate electricity to stay alive. "

"... Doesn't that make you a robot?"

"No. "

"A cyborg?"

"... I'll take that. But no."

"... What do you mean, it told my fate?"

".... It's your fate. You should find out for yourself."

With a swish of Devonna's hair, she was gone. Yup. Just like that. Poof!! I was utterly confused, and I looked a at the stick that I put next to me. I picked it up. "Wait..."

I looked into my sketchbook, and I looked at the picture of a wizard. "... I honestly was really bored drawing this. "

I exaimed the stick carefully. Then, I saw a figure in the shadows. I remained calm, even though I was very scared.

The figure placed her hand on my shoulder. She looked at me and smiled. "Wow. Liliac, come here. "

Another figure came, and I figured that was Liliac. "Pure of heart... just like the prophecy said. "

The one with the pink hair looked at me. "I'm sorry, where are my manners? I am Isabella. And my sister is Liliac. "

Liliac whispered something to Isabella. "Yes... I know, she's human... "

I felt like they were talking about me. I lifted up the stick. Liliac seemed confused, but Isabella was suprised. "You found my staff!! "

Me and Liliac said something at the same time. "Your what?"

"Well, it truely belongs to Ceres, but-"

I cut in. "Wait, the dwarf planet? "

Liliac laughed. "No, the Archer. "

"The best one. In fact, a royal Archer. "

"An archer? " I asked.

"Oh... the prophecy said that your furture would be great and powerful. " Liliac answered.

"And that's the Archer's motto. "

"... What does that have to do with me? "

"You are supossedly the Lost Sister of Ceres. "

"What?"

"Legend has it that two sisters were born. Ceres was first, but before her sister could be born, her mother was kidnapped. But it was still possible that the sister was born."

Liliac laughed excitedly. "Also, there are things that only they can control."

I pick up the wand, and give it to Isabella. "Nice meeting you guys, but I really have to go-"

Liliac stopped me. I wondered if she was fangirling. "No. There is four of us. Ceres is the sun. I am the winter. Isabella is the nature. And you might be the water!" And the fangirling continues.

Chapter 5 ~ I Think I've Become A Celebirty

Well, if these were humans, I think I would've been Selena Gomez or something. Especially Liliac... Anyway, they said to test my powers, I must think water. I bet this is some trick to make me pee.

"Are you guys trying to make me pee? "

"NOOO!! Don't!! PLEASE!!"

I look at Liliac, with utter confusion. Then Isabella stepped in. "She really doesn't like it when people pee in front of her."

I think for a moment. I shudder from all of my thoughts, and look at the lake. I felt Liliac breathing on my neck. It's really minty... Too minty.

"Would you stop breathing on my neck!? It's freezing!!"

"It's not freezing," said Isabella.

"No, she's talking about my minty breath. "

"Yeah, it's so minty, I can taste it."

"..."

"Anyways, I have to go somewhere-" Suddenly, water splashed at me. "Not cool, Liliac!!"

"Uhm, Kylin, that wasn't me."

I paused for a moment. "... What?"

Isabella laughed excitedly. "Kylin has found her inner self!! She truely IS one of us!!"

I tilted my head, very confused. "An archer? No, no. I'm a human. Unlike YOU nekoos. "

Liliac gasped. "You know what we are!?"

I rolled my eyes. "Well, duh. Everyone knows what Nekoos are."

Liliac smirked. "But do they know they exsist?"

Isabella smacked Liliac's arm. "Liliac!! Enough!!"

Liliac only stuck her tounge out at Isabella. I wondered if they were sisters.

Chapter 6 ~ Annoyed By Closed Mouths

They invited me to meet Ceres, and a few others. They mostly decided to suprise me instead of tell me what the heck was going on.

" Where are we exactly going? " I said, balancing the stick on my nose.

" To the stables. The pegasi love to take us to the city," explained Isabella, calmly. Appearently, she is the middle sister. Liliac is the youngest.

" And I LOVE the pegasi. And they love me!!" replied Liliac.

" Wait, pegasi? As in, winged horses? " I asked.

" Of course!! " replied both Liliac and Isabella is unsion. They looked at eachother and laughed.

" Can you guys at least give a clue of who we are going to meet? "

" Nope, " said Liliac. " Not until we get there. "

I cross my arms annoyed, and sigh impatiently. I suddenly hear a male's voice when we arrive at the stables.

" Hello, Liliac and Isla, my usual customers. Who is this? "

Chapter 7 ~ Meeting The Stable Man

I looked at the man, who seemed to look like a 17 year old. I knew he wasn't. In the backround, I saw a blue thing.

"Ryan," the man had said. I smiled and laughed.

"Kylin."

We shook hands and the blue thing walked to us.

"SUP, BRO!! I'm-"

"Kawaii. His name is Kawaii."

"Psh, bro, you ain't got skill. You're as weak as a feather. Weak-minded as a... a..."

"You're the only one who got no skill. Your name may be cute, but you know it ain't true."

"OH, so it's like that, huh?"

"That's right. I said it."

"I CHALLENGE YOU TO A RAP-"

"WOAH!! Please. I just need a horse. Or a pegasus."

Ryan looked at me, as if I was crazy. "That's it!?"

I looked at Ryan doubtfully. "Well... Yeah. What else?"

Ryan scratched the back of his head, and led us to the stables.

"YOU AIN'T GOT SKILL!!"

"SHUT THE- I mean... YOU DON'T GOT SKILL AT ALL, 'CAUSE ALL YOU CAN DO IS ACT CUTE."

"OH, BRO, NO YOU DIDN'T."

"Is this supposed to be some... competition or something? Because I'm clearly getting annoyed."

Isabella and Liliac crossed their arms as well, and Liliac spat on the ground. Liliac nearly tackled Ryan, but luckily, me and Isabella caught her.

"I WANT AN ALICORN!!" she screamed. "I WANT A FREAKIN' ALICORN!!"

Isabella quickly tied her hands together. "QUICKLY!! BEFORE SHE GETS LOOSE!!"

We saddled up on our pegasi, and I looked at Ryan and Kawaii. "They're pretty neat."

Isabella laughed. "They are pretty much competitive. Kawaii... He is VERY competitive. In fact... NEVER offer to babysit him."

Liliac nodded in agreement. "EVER. We have experienced the terror and horror of it happening."

I only laughed. "Okay."

We flew off. Well... sort of.

Chapter 8 ~ I'm The Worst At Flying

We started off okay. I saddled my pegasus, and got on it. Thanks to Ryan. Appearently, he was good with animals. That is, except Kawaii. All Kawaii was doing was drinking something. It smelled like coffee, I believe. I wondered why he was so hyper...

While thinking about Kawaii drinking coffee, I got on the winged-horse. I probably seemed nervous, because everyone was giving me a resurring look. Except for Kawaii. I'm beginning to think why I should never babysit Kawaii...

Liliac widened her eyes at me. She glared at me, obviously reading my mind. My, this girl has issues!! She crossed her arms and yelled.

"I DO NOT HAVE ISSUES!!"

I only rolled my eyes, and laughed. "I never said anything."

Isabella crossed her arms. "Liliac, mind-reading is a gift, not a toy."

"Well, I don't see YOU doing so!!"

Ryan only rolled his eyes, and I did also. "Oh, one more thing. This might not be the only time you'll see us."

Oh, I forgot to mention. I've never really rode a horse before. Yeah, I don't even know why I agreed to this in the first place. Can't you imagine it? Me falling, landing on random cillivans...

Ryan laughed. Oh, he didn't...

"Yup. I can read minds also. Dad says I need it for buisness."

I crossed my arms, glaring at Ryan. He smirked, and did so. "Do you have a problem with that?"

Appearently, I did; appearently the others did, also. We all spoke in unsion.

"Yes!!"

Ryan looked away, placing his hand on his neck. He looked down, then looked back up. "Uh... Really?"

"Ryan?"

"Hmm?"

"Your life is a lie," said Kawaii, literally falling down. Kawaii was laughing. He was so hilarious. Honestly, a bit rude. Kawaii was crying with laughter. Ryan only slapped Kawaii.

"Kawaii, you idiot!!"

"You're the only idiot around here."

I couldn't take it anymore, so I stepped in. "You both are idiots."

Kawaii was laughing. "OOH, she got you gooodd!!" Then Kawaii glared at me. "HEY!!"

I began to fly up, but that wasn't before Kawaii can catch up. I was only 3 feet in the air, and he literally got in my face. I could hear Liliac, Isabella, and Ryan screaming.

"KAWAII!! YOU'RE GOING TO HAVE HER FALL!!"

"KAWAII, GET OFF HER FACE!!"

"KAWAII, WHAT DID I TELL YOU ABOUT GOING WITH CUSTOMERS!?"

If I were down there, I would just glare at him. When Kawaii moved a bit, I could see how high we were.

"WOAH!!" Kawaii exclaimed. Before I could try to turn, Kawaii blocked my view. Again.

I heard Ryan say something.

"KYLIN, TURN TO YOUR LEFT!!"

I did so. He continued giving me instructions, and I eventually landed safely. When Kawaii got off my face, I was hugged warmly, by three friends. Ryan, Liliac, and Isabella.

"WE MISSED YOU!!" they all said, in unsion. I felt so warm, but they were pretty much crushing my spine. I figured they missed me that much. As I opened my eyes, I could see Kawaii hugging Ryan's leg.

"I MISSED YOU, MAN!! I missed the ground!!"

We all laughed. Then we finally flew away. Don't worry, I'm still okay. Like always. Nothing can get in my way, now. Right?

Chapter 9 ~ I'm Appearently The Damsel In Distress

Like last time, it started out okay. Until we met this freakin' life troller. My goodness, he is annoying. He had reddish-orange-ish hair. He was covered in dirt, and was dressed up as a mad hatter or something. Honestly, he would be the most annoying brother in the world. Plus, he rhymes everything.

"Hello, mi'lady. No need for persuading. As for I, am a noun. In a tuxedo, not a gown." She smiled that devious smile. I only rolled my eyes.

"Guys, remind me why we went here."

"Kylin, he may be annoying, but he holds every single answer."

"Liliac is right. He says things in riddles. It's actually a curse, but he's gotten so used to it, he became a whole other person."

"Why, you ladies are very smart!! But some of comments tore my heart." He made a mockingly sad face, but I saw a hint of laughter in it. I groaned.

"Please, just tell us. We're serious."

"Pherhaps I can... But you'll need to be in a special land. 'Twas the story of a story I made up. Maybe you can finish it with such luck."

"What!? No, no, no."

"Kylin!!" The two sisters whisper-yelled at me. Then, suddenly, I was in a gown and a tiara. I heard Isabella giggle, and then I saw Liliac elbow her.

"Hilarious," I said sartastically. "What am I, a damsel in distress?"

The man only laughed. "Of course!! I need a princess for the story. Pherhaps it will break the curse!! Anywho, your name will be Lori."

Now he's changing my name!? I was getting sick of this. Right when I was about to punch him, I appeared in a lovely lake. I knew deep in my heart that this wasn't a made-up story; this was Swan Lake.

Chapter 10 ~ I Was A Born Actor- Er, Actress

I was dressed up in a gown. I honestly didn't mind dressing up nice, but this was way too far. The shoes were so uncomfortable. I was in the forest. Strange to think that I haven't really been in a gown before. Now I know how princesses were torchered. I saw a man, who somewhat looked familiar; it was Ryan.

"Ryan? What are you doing here?" I asked.

"Milady!! The kingdom has been searching for you!!" he exclaimed. I realized once again that I was in a fairytale, not reality. Dang it.

"Oh, sir, I mustn't go back," I said, a bit over-dramatically.

"Why?" he said.

"Because... I was cursed. I turn into a swan at dawn. I'm sorry-"

"Princess... Please. I need you to-"

"Uh, no," said someone, disrupting the scene. Oh, just that guy again. Great. I realized I was back in my lovely clothes.

"Well, did I win?"

"Yes, but-"

"I get to go home. We promised. And you will tell me."

(I'd like to thank SoulReaper~ (Kawaii) and RyanHuen (Ryan) for entering!! .3. Also, PM me your character's information and backstory for a chance to get in my story!!)

This post has been edited one or more times, the last time was:
2014-04-04 04:21:40

~Justin~ (2014-01-25 02:15:01)

OMG AWESOME

PokeCat (2014-01-25 14:35:02)

Eh, not bad.

If you want an honest writers opinion, then you should add some more vocabulary and suspence. Drag scenes outa tad longer.

Otherwise, nice.

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