TheEpicOne (2013-06-13 03:15:53)

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MOAR MAKE THEM LONGER

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Emi (2013-06-13 16:30:17)

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if people stop critisizing me mabey i'll finish the story and make it better

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PaRappa_Rappa (2013-06-21 01:32:01)

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It's not very good.

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AmayaTime8D (2013-06-21 13:39:02)

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We're giving you tips, not criticising. I actually like this story...

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Emi (2013-06-22 12:49:57)

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-_-' ok

(continued)
"How'd he even get up here!?" I look at Jake in alarm.
"I.... I don't know, but we need to do something about this." he goes downstairs (sorry its not longer, writers block)

This post has been edited one or more times, the last time was:
2013-06-22 19:50:26

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AmayaTime8D (2013-06-23 20:40:19)

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Heh, I feel you. Writer's block SUCKS BALLS.
Anyway, I think you should edit them later and make them longer if they are only like a paragraph long.

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