simmonsa1851 (2013-05-18 12:38:47)

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Sorry, nothing to see here :/

This post has been edited one or more times, the last time was:
2013-07-23 18:35:08

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MeNobody14 (2013-05-18 12:53:05)

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Spacing. That's all I ask.

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simmonsa1851 (2013-05-18 15:04:58)

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Thanks

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MeNobody14 (2013-05-18 15:11:33)

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Time to write a full review! :3

The writing.

Your spelling is ok, and most of your grammer checks out, you just need spacing.

The story.

Ever move so fast that you didn't see much of what's around you? Well, That's what the beginning is like. There's no real backstory. That's simply a summary. You need depth, otherwise, there's no real characters, and the story gets quite boring.

All in All.

It's decent. It needs to be longer, but this is a good start. No thumbs up here, but no thumbs down, either.

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simmonsa1851 (2013-05-19 02:37:01)

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K, I'll work on it.

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:21:50)

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How did you find this This is ooooooooolllllllllllllllllddddddddddddddd

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:24:04)

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lololololol u mad bro?????????????

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:25:27)

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Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I try to make this Globally popular!!!!!!!

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:28:24)

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You made up the thought

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:32:14)

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SPELL POST RIGHT AND I'LL THINK ABOUT IT!!!!!!

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simmonsa1851 (2013-07-23 11:34:35)

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Fine...

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