MadHatter (2013-05-23 01:46:14)

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Hello kids, I am here to tell you a story about three kids. And during this story,there shall be nolaughter. As itmay be sad.But....... Yeah,I don't know

One lovely winter day, the smallest of snowflakes fluttered down to Earth in an extreme downpour. Carolina,age 14, held out her hands to inspect the little flakes. Carolina was thankful for everything she had, for there was not alot. But Joesph had alot and was the snotty stuck up of the group. But for his stuff,his popularity let the group grow to everyone.Joesph sat on a nearby bench memorizing carolina's action. Lastly, laying in the snow,looking to the sky,was Jennifer Leigh. Jennifer Leigh was the adventurer, and a smart one.

"Carolina! You must stop standing out there.You'll catch a cold" Joesph totally ignored Jennifer Leigh. "It wouldn't matter" Carolina replied. Joesph rolled his eyes and continued sitting on the bench. This extremely bothered Jennifer Leigh. What gives him permission to sit and do nothing. Jennifer Leigh knew Joesph loved carolina"That's the only reason he actually hangs around us" thougfht Jennifer Leigh.

Just then, a limo, typical Joepsph,pulled up to the park. Peter came out of the driver's seat."Master Joesph, your father wants you and your friend at the manor.A party shall comince at 6 o'clock this evening. There are dresses for your lady firends" tatedpeter,professionally. "Well, you heard him ladies, lets go!" yelled Joesph, glad to get out of the cold. The groupclimbed into the limo.

At the manor,Joesph,Carolina,and Jennifer Leigh climbed the stairs to the guests rooms, where the suit and dresses were modeled. Joesphhad a simpleblack suit. But the dresses were outstanding.
Carolina's dresswas carolina blue. Floor length, and full out poofy. It was likebeing in the froting of a cupcake. Therewasnostraps,and a lace corset. Fine silk wastouchable soft. Carolina's hair was upin the tightest bunwith a tiara.
Jennifer Leigh's dress was similar,with the poofand the straps and corset. But instead of just the corset being lace, it was all lace. Lace with the finest detail nobody has ever seen. JenniferLeigh's long hair was pulled into a high and tight pony-tail and curled into perfect locks at the ends. A lace bow completed the look. they could tell Joesph wanted only the best for them.

Interlocking arms, the three made their way down the grand stepsto amaze everyone their. Includeing Jennifer Leigh's closet "guy friend" to her. His name was Sasqer. The music started wityh aslow dance.Joesph immediantly started to dance, and JenniferLeigh and Sasqer started to dance too.

Long into the night, around 10:45PM, something terrible happened. But the group of four were outside in the garden. They didn't hear a thing


OKAY. Now,PLEEEEEAAAAAAASSSSEEEE reply with anything you wanted to say about this. Im going to go get started on pt. 2.

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MeNobody14 (2013-05-23 02:44:20)

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OMG! This is amazing!


Not.

So many mistakes, I'm not even gonna try to count them.

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MadHatter (2013-05-24 01:38:54)

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If it's the spaces, thats my tupid keyboard.
Pay a bit more attention to the detail, cause you must not actually see good writing.

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MeNobody14 (2013-05-24 02:32:31)

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^"Tupid"? Hrm...

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MadHatter (2013-05-24 02:47:33)

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Like I said.
Keyboard
It's extremely old.
Thankfully I'm currently on a new one.

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MeNobody14 (2013-05-24 03:05:45)

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K. Fix the mistakes, please. And keep your stories in one thread. Not one-hundred.

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imawsome12 (2013-05-24 04:51:07)

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I know good reading when I see it. Her. by Me13 is good wrighting. This was plane out stupid. Not to descriptuve, broke rules, so many i'm not even gonna say them all. It wasn't even funny. If this was supposed to be funny, you have the worst sense of laughter ever.

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THaT1GuY9001 (2013-05-24 10:22:39)

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Please keep your stories in one thread. C and P this into the first one.

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