Mercenary (2013-07-02 02:35:43)

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^

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-02 04:31:49)

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Um, It's okay for a first time story. I don't really get it?. But good job. The detailing is a good part of story telling. Which you got well. I give it 6.3/10 for first timer stories. Next time just try to make more sense with the plot.

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BVBArmy4ever (2013-07-02 05:08:17)

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i liked it Devin

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-02 05:59:54)

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Part 2, Much better. Good to see you really have the plot down

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-03 18:27:37)

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Bella is playing Mariah Carie, so I guess I'm Simon Cowell. It needs work. A lot of it. Take more time to spell and think the story through. And tip? Don't disable spell check. Rating? 4.2/15.0

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-04 01:35:57)

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I don't have spell check but I spell right. And how dare you call me Bella and compare me to Mariah Carie >:U

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-04 19:49:57)

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^No. No part three.


'Tis only an analogy. Unless your melons are big like hers.

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Super_~_Junior. (2013-07-04 23:07:37)

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My name is Bellamy not Bella ._.

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MeNobody14 (2013-07-05 02:27:17)

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^No, your idol is named "Bellamy". You, are named Bella. As stated by many users previous.

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