collsier (2014-12-25 02:19:26)

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December,15 2012 on a snowy cold day. There were three boys named Billy, Joe, and tim. "Finally our trip to alaska!" said tim. "I don't want to go!" said joe "Well you have to!" said mom. "Fine!" said joe. "Mom wheres Billy"? said tim. "I don't know!" BILLY!!! "Yeah!" screamed Billy! "C'mon guys lets go were late!" said mom. Finally where here said tim! New-york airport! said mom it's very busy! said Billy! I know right! said jim C'mon guys! Where almost late! screamed mom! Where flight 787 asked mom. Follow me mam said the Capatain. Oh thank-you! said mom. Your welcome said the captain. Billy look at these first class seats said tim. I know right! their so soft! said tim. "Hello i'm your captain for this flight. And thanks for choosing united airlines. Now please buckle your seat belts! said the captain. This is the best part! screamed tim! 2 hours and 30 minutes into the flight the captain relized were decreasing Where going down! screamed the capatain! Pull up! Pull up! Pull up! said the alarm! Mom!? asked tim Yeah? said mom Look! mom where going to crash where going down! screamed tim! Part-2 coming soon!

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Dimentia (2014-12-25 19:45:26)

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BAD. Dude, you need grammar, punctuation, and not put exclamation points everywhere.

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